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smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Nov 27, 2008 at 10:01 PM  #1 

mun apekhya karichi rati saribaku
gote nua sakalaku......
mora khojiba je arambha......
mun khoje tumaku,
lal sindura topa pari sakalara surya re
pakhira kakalire..
situa sakalara fanka rastare,
bainsira surare.........
mu khoje tumaku
badal ghera nila akasare.,
sisira vija sabuja ghasare..
mu khoje tumaku
jana ghahali purna raja rastare.traffic signal re,shopping mall re
mun khoji bulu thae....
chota chota galire,nadi ghatare,pokhari thuthare.samudra kulare,mandirara pahachare
jete bele sandya bati jali uthe......
mandirare sandhya alatira ghanta baji uthe
mun feri ase klanta sharnta au vara kranta mana nei
puni apekhya kare au gote nua sakalaku,nua surya ku........
au sara raati basi basi bhabe....
satare kana tumaku kebe khoji paaibi.......?
Raina
Posted Nov 29, 2008 at 01:49 PM  #2 
Dear Smrutirekha,
Very nice poem. Excellent!!!
Exactly the words that I used to think for years. Now the search has come to an end but without any result. Sometimes it is much better if the search never ends, at least some hope is there for a brigter day !!
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Nov 29, 2008 at 03:23 PM  #3 

thanx raina .......i like u r coment very much.
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Nov 29, 2008 at 07:22 PM  #4 

mu apekhya karithili tuma asiba bataku..
mu apekhya karithili tuma pada sabda mo daraja bahare......
mo agana amjire........
mo gharara chari kantha vitare.........
aaji tuma asicha
satare tume asicha....
mo khusira sima nahi
mu mira pari nachi jauchi.....gai jauchi
mo padara paunjee bajuchi.....
mo hatara kankana bajuchi runu jhunu hoi
au mu bhabuchi kemiti karibi tumara satkara
kana dele tume sabuthu besi khusi heba..
tume kana kichi kahiba?
na mu mora kichi khusi dei tumara kichi dukha nebi.....
mora je aaji khusira seema nahi
mu apekhya karithili tuma asiba bataku................
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Dec 03, 2008 at 08:58 PM  #5 

satare...a dharani  puni thare sajiba .......
tara sei puruna besare........
puni pindhiba tara sei ....
sabuja rangara sahree.....
benire naiba ...
juhi, jai ,hena ra gajara.....
hatare pindhiba......
sorisa pulara kankana.......
au bekare pakeiba...
dhanara suneli kenda.....
satare...........
se feripaiba tara puruna rupare..
puni subhiba
khusi au anandara kolahala
ta pada paunji sabda ra......
se puni ghodei deba ta
santi ra panata kani
samaste puni ek hei jibe
ta kolare.......
kehi taku khayata bikhyata au bibarnna karibeni
satare se feripaiba ta puruna rupare.
chariyade sukha santi au anandara barsa heba..
dhoineba samastankara dukha,kasta au asanti
raktapata, hinsa au bidwesa jemiti kouthi haji jibe
au bhuli jibe ai dharaniku feribara bata
pakhimane puni khusire gai uthibe..
samudra khusire garjee uthiba
nadi kulu kulu sabdare bahijeeba
samaste puni eka swarare kahibe
ai dharani amara au ame ai dharanira
satare kana a dharani puni thare sajiba ta puruna besare................................
soumya priyadarsini
Posted Dec 07, 2008 at 09:20 AM  #6 

all the three poems made a pleasant reading. beautiful pieces indeed! but i suggest smrutirekha, that you should give a title to each of these poems.
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Dec 08, 2008 at 10:40 PM  #7 

thanx soumya ...........sure i will try my best to do.......
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Dec 17, 2008 at 07:32 AM  #8 

amara bandhutwa
Emiti bi gote dina asiba,
amara bandhutwa kebala smruti tie hoi rahijiba......
samaya ra chaka gadi jiba agaku agaku,
barsa ,masa .dina bitijiba..
samaya au jugara paribartana saha
ame duhen durei jiba bahut duraku
bahut duraku.....
au amara dekha hebani
au ame katha hebani ghanta ghanta dhari........
tathapi ame bandhu hoi rahiba chiradina.....
bhagya saha pada milai ame agei jiba
bahut kichi chhadi jiba pachhare..
samaya au jibanara byastata vitare
ame haji jiba .......
tathapi ame bandhu hoi rahiba chiradina
kehi kahara dukha ,sukha tike anubhaba kariparibani
hasa ,luha tike dekhi paribani....
sahajya ra hata tike bi badhei paribani
maaili maaili ra duratwa badhi jiba ama vitare
tathapi ame badhu hoi rahiba chiradina
jete bele ama bandhutwara smruti mote chuin jiba.......
mo othare tike hasa kheli jiba.
mo akhire tike luha jakei asiba...
kebala mora mane padiba..
tumara sahajya kari thiba dinagudi,
tumara aswasana o prerana ra kathagudi
mu basi basi bhabu thibi.......
satare kana ame duhen ....
kebe sanga hoi kichi samaya kati thilu,
kichu dukha banti thilu..
na sabu kebala swapna ...
se swapna heu,se smruti heu,se duratwa heu......
tathapi ame bandhu hoi rahiba chiradina.
na kana..........
Nishi
Posted Dec 17, 2008 at 07:44 PM  #9 

very nice and touching poem......Good work Smruti !
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Dec 17, 2008 at 09:05 PM  #10 

thanx nishi........bahut khusi lage kahara comment tike asile au seita hi mote bahut prerana die agaku agei baku.........
soumya priyadarsini
Posted Dec 20, 2008 at 07:11 PM  #11 

really how many of us love to visualise the darker side of future? milan (bandhutwa) may be sweet. but bichhed is inevitable and is bound to happen some day or the other. we should be prepared for both. i think this is the core message in this poem. 
smrutirekha
Posted Dec 21, 2008 at 02:20 PM  #12 

thanx soumya.........
smrutirekha
Posted Jan 06, 2009 at 03:01 PM  #13 
smruti

chota gote sabda 'smruti'
janma tara atitaru
ase se tatitaru.......
kintu se ganta ghara......
asaranti anubhuti ra ,anubhabara.......
kichi dukhara au kichi sukhara......
kahapaain puni tike hasara au tope luhara,
smruti ase ekantare..nisabdare...nisithare...
au asamayare......
kebe se bharidie akhire luha.......
puni kebe othare tike hasa.
smruti sathi ekantara......nisangatara......
tara thikana atitare.
se asamayare ase
kichi dukhasukha ra anubhaba au anubhuti ki bante .......
puni feri jae nisabdare.....
smruti hue abhula.....
smruti hue alibha......
kintu smruti hajile loka pagala hue.
kebe kebe smruti ase bana jharana pari....
ta sitala sparsa re dhoidie nisangataku,bedanaku dukhaku.......
smruti ra janma samastanka paain.....
kebe smruti hue ekantara....
puni kebe hue anubhabara.......
smruti hue anubhuti ra.......
nisangatara,bedanara ,kichi ananda ra....
kichi dukhara au puni kichi khusira........
kintu smruti ra kie.......
smruti ta kebala smruti tie...
chota gote sabda tie....
smrutirekha
Posted Jan 08, 2009 at 02:41 PM  #14 

kebala mo paain........

Tumaku bandhi rakhibaku heba....
mote mora atita ,bhabisyata au bartaman vitare,
na hele mu puni ghuri bulibi eka eka,
mahasunyare...andhara ratire..
taana kharare...situa sakalare.......marichika pachare.......

mora dara tumaku harei debare....
tumaku harei mu kemiti banchibi...
tume je samastanka tharu vinna manisa tie..
kie bujhiba mo manara akuha katha,adekha byatha,ajhara luha..
au mo hasa pachare luchi thiba aneka dukhaku,

nisabdare kie haata rakhiba mo pithire
bharideba mo hrudaya nirabare..
au pochi deba mo luha ajanatare
tuma adrushya alingana ra sparsa mu anubhaba kare
mo sarirar pratyeka sira prasirare
mo lomakupara chota chota chidrare

mu saitibini tumaku mo smruti madhyare
smruti kebebi bismruti hei jiba
mu sajai rakhibi tumaku chiradina
mo hrudayara bandi ghara vitare

tumeje mo paain amulya ratna tie
pankaru baharithiba padmatie..
koilaru bahari thiba hira tie
samuka vitara moti tie..
tume mo paain
santa ,singdha ,sabutharu pabitra,mora bahu apanara
srestha manisa tie......
Ranjana
Posted Jan 08, 2009 at 03:26 PM  #15 
bahuta badhia hoichi.bahuta bhala lagila.

han tuma pari ta lekhi paribi ni.kintu 2nd try karichi.au 10 mnt re aeta ku lekhichi

               janini mu paribi ki nahi, tathapi lekhuchi
                  chhati ra abega ta manare kebethu jaala je bunuchi.
                  arambha ru anischitata ...jemitiki anguthi gudaka bandha 
                  padichi...
                  bisaya bastu ku nei aneka prasna,
                  byanga kabi te hebi na bastaba dharmi?
                  uttara bhi paili sei bisaya bastu tiru
                  samapta ti heba bastabakara, mo..ri pain aau
                  byanga  tumari  pain.
                  kabi je kebe bhabiki lekhe ...?
                  tathapi mu bhabuchi....
                  janini  paribi ki nahi, tathapi lekhuchi...
soumya priyadarsini
Posted Jan 10, 2009 at 10:52 PM  #16 

ranjana, you have said "byanga kabi te hebi na bastaba dharmi?"  byanga means satire and satire is always based on reality (bastaba dharmi). so these two are not contradictory. they are one and the same.  
Sujata
Posted Jan 27, 2009 at 06:16 PM  #17 
Wow..nice poems..keep up the good work !!
smrutirekha sahoo
Posted Jan 27, 2009 at 09:35 PM  #18 
if u want to see more poem in oriya n english then pls visit
smrutibeda .com
rashmirekha dash
Posted Feb 17, 2009 at 02:51 PM  #19 
all the poems are plesant reading.Great job. Keep it up!!!
R. Dash
bbsr
JYOTRIMAYEE DASH
Posted March 26, 2009 at 10:39 AM  #20 

HAI SMRUTI DIDI U HAV DONE AGREAT JOB UR POEMS ARE FABULOUS,KEEP ROCKING,FROM CHENNAI
sitilagna
Posted Dec 06, 2009 at 10:34 AM  #21 
kabita bastabik chamatkar
apananka drustikona
manaku chhuinla
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Posted Dec 27, 2009 at 10:25 AM  #22 

        

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Posted Dec 27, 2009 at 01:40 PM  #23 
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smrutirekha
Posted May 21, 2010 at 09:14 PM  #24 

Nisangata aaji mora premika sajichi
                       dui bahu prasari mote adari neichi
                       aabadha karichi mote ta alingana bhitare.
                       mu hajei deichi nijara bartamana ku....
                       khojuchi nua bhabisyata tie.

                       nisanga samaya aaji mora atitara kichi madhura smruti...
                       nisanga ai pruthibi karichi mote niraba premikaa tie,
                       kichi abhabita bhabana  aprunaa swapna ku ...
                       sabda re sajai mu aaji lekhuchi kabita.
                    sanga jadi mote pratarana kare........
                       nisangata mora priya heu,
                       sanga jadi mote trusita kare..
                      dukha ,bedana au klanti re bhare......
                      tebe nisangata mora priya heu.
                                              
                              smruti
                              20.5.10
smrutirekha
Posted May 21, 2010 at 09:35 PM  #25 

Feri asibi ki mu.........
          tuma situa sakalara pahanti nidare swapna tie hoi?
    tume swapnara usnatare hajijauthiba....
khojuthiba nijaku nua kari bastaba au abastaba bhitare
sakalara kolahalaku upekhya kari....
             tume chandi hei jauthiba swapnara mayajalare.........
ketebele muruki hasi deuthiba ta......
ketebele puni karaleutai soijauthiba gadha nidara chhalana kari
         mu chali thibi tuma swapna saha nisabdare
samastanka ajanatare......khub sabadhanare.......
pada chapi chapi dhire dhire......
     tuma  swapna jadi bhangi jaye  mo pada sabdare..
tume   puni bhuli jiba mote sakalara sabu byastata bhitare.   


 smruti 23.1 .10
 
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Pratima
Posted May 28, 2010 at 08:11 AM  #26 

Both poems are superb. One on "nisangata" and the other one on "swapna". Well done Smruti. Keep it up!
smrutirekha
Posted June 06, 2010 at 10:17 PM  #27 

dhanyabad pratima.
Paramita Dhal
Posted June 23, 2010 at 01:07 PM  #28 
Dear smrutirekha
tuma poem "smruti" re lekhila je
Nisangata aaji mora premika sajichi
-----------------------------> khojuchi nua bhabisyata tie.

puni pherigala atita ku kemiti
puni atita re najae taku upama deba
mote bujha padilani
kharap bhabibani tike jadi bhujhae deba bhala heba

Nisangata aaji mora premika sajichi
                       dui bahu prasari mote adari neichi
         aabadha karichi mote ta alingana bhitare.
             mu hajei deichi nijara bartamana ku....
                       khojuchi nua bhabisyata tie.
 hele tapta luha dhara othare libhi jae kahuthila kahani
Rachana
Posted July 01, 2010 at 01:04 AM  #29 
 Hi  Smrutirekha,  Congratulations, Pl keep up the trend and go ahead with your thought and emotions with very sensitive and heart touching poems. Some of your poems Amori Bandhutwa and  Kewal Tumaripai etc as many are indeed very emotional. Miss Bijayalaxmi Nanda of Ganjam who is now in US as software Eng has this type of high profile writings. Her Dreams and Distitute etc many poems are of similar type. Pl make collection of all your poems to a book and publish so that it will be more highlighted about your ability and strength of approch. With all best wishes. Rajlaxmi Padhy Berhampur ,Camp USA
susmita
Posted July 12, 2010 at 08:35 PM  #30 
Smrutirekha,

Tumra kabita guidka bahut bhala hoeichhi. Ei gudiku nei gote bahi prakash kara.

Tume keuthare rahuchha?

Regards
Susmita
smrutirekha
Posted July 15, 2010 at 05:00 PM  #31 
dear pratima.
many many thanks for u r comment,mote laguchi tume kabita ti thikre padhina,
mu atitaku ferini.........khojuchi ....nua bhabisyata tie...bhabisyata ta fast nuhe.its future.
Mili
Posted July 26, 2010 at 10:49 AM  #32 
Hi dear
            Really mate bahut bhal lagila....... tamra kabita
           sabuthhu besi bhal lagila "FERI AASIBI KI MU"
 
 
 
 
     
Ramij
Posted Feb 28, 2011 at 02:20 AM  #33 
Bahut badhiya laguchi kabita..
sanghamitra

Sanghamitra Rath Satapathy
Registered: Feb 27, 2011
Posts: 103
Posted March 23, 2011 at 12:04 PM  #34 

bahut sunadar kavita
sanghamitra

Sanghamitra Rath Satapathy
Registered: Feb 27, 2011
Posts: 103
Posted March 23, 2011 at 12:06 PM  #35 
for smruti di
tume rahuchha kouthi?
sanghamitra

Sanghamitra Rath Satapathy
Registered: Feb 27, 2011
Posts: 103
Posted March 23, 2011 at 12:11 PM  #36 
FOR SMRUTI DI
Hrudayara abegara atmalipi
abhignyata ra anubhuti
rasi rasi sapanare adhabhanga kalpana ku nei
                    tuma lekhani ru
abyakta akuha bhasa jebe kabya rupe jharijae,
sabda jodi kavita ra rangare mu rangai pareni
                     kichi jhapsa jhapsa
                      khanda khanda bakya nei
asamahita prsna bhitare
unkimare keita sabda matra
 
srasta tume srusti tuma manda nuhe

                                                                    ROSY
smrutirekha
Posted June 29, 2011 at 04:15 PM  #37 

bahut bahut dhanyabad  sanghamitra.mu bahut dina pare oriya nari re logon kali au tuma comment dekhili.sabuthu besi bhala lagila moo paain lekhithiba kabita.
 mu bhubaneswar re rahuchi.mo id ..............................(Deleted)
u can contact me there.again thanks.........tc
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sonali dash
Posted Sept 29, 2011 at 02:23 PM  #38 
Jagannath....jagatara nath

se jagatara naatha,se kaalia takhura.kete maayare aamaku bandhichi.dukhinka dukha dekhuchi,hasuchi.....kahuchi jie aase se jae,je kare se pae se aba bhala heu ki kharap 
heu.dukha sukha kaha bhagyare kete achi sie eka jaanichi.

sarbe bhabantu sukhinaya....
bijeta hota
Posted March 22, 2012 at 12:28 AM  #39 
yah!!   really superb poems
barshapriyadarshani

barsha priyadarshani
Registered: April 09, 2012
Posts: 5
Posted April 17, 2012 at 04:15 PM  #40 
Hi smutirekha ,


really nice kabita
Madhuri2405

Madhuri Panda
Registered: March 27, 2012
Posts: 37
Posted April 19, 2012 at 04:27 PM  #41 
Hi Smruti,

           So nice and wonderful poems.thanks yaar such good poems we get to read.
smrutirekha
Posted Aug 05, 2012 at 08:35 AM  #42 
              pratichabi
  
Mu dine feri jibi sabu nisangata ku pachare pakai.
feri jibi asta surja ra haata dhari...
misi jibi sei nila digantare.
  
suruja feriba nua sakala ku sangare nei.
rati bi feriba..feriba grisma,barsha au seeta
fula bi futiba mahaka jhariba. pakhibi dakiba..
tumari paain.
 
mu kintu feribi tuma ghara ra kanthare..
pratichabi tie hoi.
tume rakta golapa re sajei deba
dui akhire tike luha jakei jiba.

mo smruti feriba bisesh gote tithi nei

mu dine feri jibi..........   

(smruti 4.8.1012)
smrutirekha
Posted Aug 14, 2012 at 01:39 PM  #43 
          ANTIMA SEEMA
   
 jadi mu kebe chalijaye ai pruthibi ku chadi
 bhabibani..mu thaki deichi tumaku..
megha mukta andgara raatire
akasaru tara tie khasipadibar jadi kebe dekha..
janiba mu achi..
mu achi tuma hrydaya ra prati spandanare
tuma sesa niswas re..
mu kan kebe mari pare tuma banchi thiba jaye..
 mu apekhya karithibi tumaku mahakalara antima seemare.
 smruti(5.8 2012
subhashree

Subhashree muduli
Registered: Jan 13, 2012
Posts: 2
Posted Aug 17, 2012 at 11:20 AM  #44 
@smrutirekha Bahut sundar kabita....
smrutirekha
Posted Aug 17, 2012 at 11:58 AM  #45 
bahut bahut dhanyabad subhashree.
SMRUTIREKHA
Posted Aug 17, 2012 at 12:12 PM  #46 
             SABDA

 tume mu au aai kabita
tuma preranare mu lekhichali kabita pare kabita..
ebe mo sabda ra ganta ghara khali padichi
   kouthu anibi ete sabda au kemiti lekhibi kabita....
saaunti anibiki kichi sabda atitaru smruti ru..na khojibi barta manara samparka bhitare..
na tike apekhya karibi anagata bhabiswat ku..
jadi kehi bhikhyare dei diye kichi sabda mo kabita paain..
 tume diaa kichi sabda  tuma asaranti sabda ra bhandara gharu
      jama kari diaa mo jama khatare.....
     kahibani.......
  jaha mora sabuta tumara....jaha tumara sabuta mora...puni aai diaa niaa kahinhi
  jeebanara aanka khatare sabu hisab mora bhul pramanita hoichi
 bina hisab nikasre tume mote kichi sabda diaa
 se sabda re sajei mu debi tumaku kabita.....
 hebi kabiyatri tie.......
  SMRUTI(11.8.2012)
sikuna
Posted Nov 02, 2012 at 05:48 PM  #47 
Khojuchi mu niti,
khojuthibi
jibana mo thiba jae tumaku
jebe tame mate mili jiba 
sedina bhuli mu jibi nijaku
aau palati jibi 
aka diga haja chadhei
shweta..
Posted Dec 08, 2012 at 12:10 PM  #48 
bahut bhala heichi kabita...
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